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“KILL HIM! KILL HIM!” the witch cried frantically as she witnessed her light orbs go dark around the circle. Soldiers from all directions ran into stab Vasiddin with their swords. Vasiddin let go of the witch to snap at some incoming attacks. With the magic prison gone, Vasiddin ripped through the bars and flung the top of his cage over his back with his head. He stood up to his full height, glared at the frightened soldiers, and let out a terrifying roar. Many soldiers turned white, some just turned and ran away. Once sweep of fire set a dozen men aflame, and Vasiddin crushed others as he lunged forward. He sun, whipped his tail and wings, sliced men with his enormous claws, and blew great swaths of flame. He was a red cyclone of death.

“KILL HIM! KILL HIM!” the witch cried frantically as she witnessed her light orbs go dark around the circle. From all directions, soldiers wielding their swords ran forward to slay Vasiddin, who let go of the witch to snap at some of the incoming attackers. With the magic prison gone, Vasiddin ripped through the bars and, using his mighty head, flung the top of his cage over his back. Now he reared up to his full height, glared at the frightened soldiers, and let out a terrifying roar. Many soldiers turned white, while others turned to try and run away. One sweep of fire set a dozen men aflame. Others were crushed as Vasiddin lunged forward. He spun, whipped his tail and wings, sliced men with his enormous claws and blew great swaths of flame. He was a red cyclone of death.

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“KILL HIM! KILL HIM!” the witch cried frantically as she witnessed her light orbs go dark around the circle. From ~~Soldiers from~~ all directions, soldiers wielding their swords ran forward to slay~~into stab~~ Vasiddin, who ~~with their swords. Vasiddin~~ let go of the witch to snap at some of the incoming attackers.~~attacks.~~ With the magic prison gone, Vasiddin ripped through the bars and, using his mighty head, flung the top of his cage over his back. Now he reared up ~~with his head. He stood up~~ to his full height, glared at the frightened soldiers, and let out a terrifying roar. Many soldiers turned white, while others~~some just~~ turned to try and run~~ran~~ away. One ~~Once~~ sweep of fire set a dozen men aflame. Others were~~, and Vasiddin~~ crushed as Vasiddin ~~others as he~~ lunged forward. He spun~~sun~~, whipped his tail and wings, sliced men with his enormous claws, and blew great swaths of flame. He was a red cyclone of death.